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Post by Terror of Death on Jan 27, 2007 23:50:36 GMT -5
The start of my first comic. Tell me what you think
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Crystalman.EXE
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Post by Crystalman.EXE on Jan 28, 2007 0:59:35 GMT -5
NO.
NO.
NO.
I'm sorry, but you need a lot of help.
LUCKALY....
I'm here to help!
Okay First things first. Comic placement.
[_][_][_] [_][_][_]
Place your panels like that. It saves space.
Also, Sprite Placement.
See the green around your room picture? That's called:
Wated Space.
Try to make your box size smaller, or the sprite size bigger. Jus try to fill the enrtire panel and make it better.
Cursing:
In real life, people don't use the F-bomb every two sentences. And it's not funny, if you want people to like it, find a better way to convey your comedy without cursing.
Words you should never use:
F*** S*** D*** PWN LOL
Those words make you look like an idiot, and people won't like your comic.
Comedy.
What's the point? It's realy not that good... you need a good joke, try thinking about a joke before using it. Ask your slef: "Is this funny?" Or tell a friend about it, and see if they laugh.
Textboxes:
No problem with them. I like the text, but try using a better font, like "Comic Sans MS"....
As for story, I really can't crique you since you only have one comic up, but ask yourself this:
"What is my story?" Once you know a good idea of your story, then make your comics.
Your doing good for a start, your spriting is good, but you need to work on content and comedy. So keep it up, and make your next comic better.
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Post by HeatBlaze on Jan 28, 2007 2:14:28 GMT -5
Well this was interesting.......Well people use "pwn" and "lol" in there comic as a joke sometimes but they don't use it 24/7. You just gotta know when to use pwn and lol and if you put lol don't kill overdo it xD.
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Post by AreaMan on Jan 28, 2007 2:18:01 GMT -5
You should also use an overworld sprite rather than a batte form sprite.
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Post by Terror of Death on Jan 28, 2007 9:58:32 GMT -5
You should also use an overworld sprite rather than a batte form sprite. I dont have a overworld sprite of Scathe yet. and thanks for the advice Cystalman, I'll try to make it better next time EDIT: I changed things up bit
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Post by Wattman on Jan 29, 2007 11:31:27 GMT -5
Well... It looks a little better. But still... As Crystal said, change text, Comic Sans looks much better, since it is a comic we are talking about.
And if you don't have an over-world sprite... start making some then. It will only do you better if you're making more comics.
But the fact that you went the way with the three-squares-a-road thingy showed up better result.
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Post by Terror of Death on Jan 29, 2007 17:27:32 GMT -5
I know. but I'm gonna stop making comics right now and work on some more sprites
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Crystalman.EXE
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Post by Crystalman.EXE on Jan 29, 2007 19:50:19 GMT -5
One thing I'd liketo see is content.
Heed my words.
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Post by Terror of Death on Jan 29, 2007 20:10:47 GMT -5
I'll try to work on that when I start making comics again
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Post by Wattman on Jan 30, 2007 10:23:20 GMT -5
Oh! And I come up with something. If you're doing another version of the first square... Instead of saying: "Wake the hell up!!!" which I thinks sounds like it had grammar faultiness, he could say something like: "Wake up for God's sake!" or "Wake up goddammit!" For me, it sounds better, and even funnier.
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Crystalman.EXE
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Post by Crystalman.EXE on Feb 2, 2007 16:56:58 GMT -5
Agreed.
Mild Cursing is a safe middle ground between n00bish heavy cursing and clean humor.
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