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Post by gammaforce101 on Nov 27, 2006 23:38:25 GMT -5
Hi, this is Gamma. I'm writing a fanfic here. Enjoy. Post you're comments please.
"So this is where I am now! A human about to try for a job at Hunter HQ. Plus I'm a minor! This is awesome! I oughta' activate my armor now so they don't see through my ruse." ZzzzpzpzpspsssCRINSH!!! "And so my story begins!" As you're probably wondering, how could a human get a job here? Right? Well I'll tell you. I worked at a machine shop when I turned 14, and made a few things. Then I made a scanner and it found an abnormal energy. A capsul marked"DO NOT OPEN! Holy Dark inside." was there and as any kid would, I opened it, freeing the energy. Then my scanner absorbed it and, well, here I am, a runaway kid with outrageously powerful abilities. I had a gun, a beam sword, and I become an adept fighter whenever transformed. I don't know how, but I feel empowered when I'm like this. I've decided to call myself; Bio-Mech. Now to break in to HQ and screw up some offices. Heh, a kid's gotta do some mischief, right?
And that's paragraph one, it's nowhere near done, but I'll keep writing if I'm told it's any good.
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Wattman
MegaMan Fan
*sigh* No life...
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Post by Wattman on Nov 28, 2006 12:26:45 GMT -5
Hm... Even if it is just a beginning, it doesn't tell much. I mean, do we now how this "Bio-Mech" looks like? No. Were it is taking place? No. (or I'm just not so well knowed about the RockMan world)
Make a different beginning. That tells much more. Sure, I began my story with a dialoge, but that is something different. Anyhow, you must tell how people looks like and such.
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Post by gammaforce101 on Nov 29, 2006 0:09:34 GMT -5
Remember, this is NOT edited, thus the constant spelling and punctuation mistakes. Also, thanks for the feedback Wattman. I just figured everyone knew enough about the X series to get that this takes place INSIDE the X series(do a bit of research on this matter). I'm making it to cover some plot holes and such. This is meant to familierize the reader with character, not looks, although I'm adding that in the next part. So here it is!
Hmm, I think the Hunter HQ should be well guarded, but then again. I let my Bio-Mech instincts take any logic I had, another thing I gleamed from the "Holy Dark" energy. I hadn't tested my powers out much, and had little experience. I extended e-charged claws and ,without so much and a scratch on the building, scaled the wall. A dark veil rapped around me as I ran, and in each window, each mirror, I was just a shimmer of light. I ran up as high as I could without getting my glow caught on camera, witch got me to rest for a little, watching through a window, listening. A faint voice is heard, but my helm morphed to let me drown out other noises. "...and such covers Zero's second heroic death. Any questions on how Zero re-built himself with only an arm and a head should be directed at you're ordinary history mech. that's all for today class, and you're homwwork is to create adaptors for the auto-runners." Now what the hell are auto-runners? GAACK!!! I may be a machine but I still need air. Gotta get inside, FAST! I kept climbing until the one darkend room. My shoulder blades, witch are my scanners, didn't pick up anything in there some it seemed like a good choice. I popped my phase-blade out of my arm and cut open the re-inforced super glass, then climbed in and phased the window back into place. Finnaly, fresh-ish air. Hmm... posters, digi-papers, reports, names strewn on the floor. But one stands out, the name on the door, "X's Files! Keep Out! It's MY room."
"I think I can have plenty of fun in here, especially with this."
That's all for today folks. I'm going into looks now. Don't worry, it'll get exciting soon!
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Post by AreaMan on Nov 29, 2006 13:14:10 GMT -5
I like the story style! It's written from kinda a sauve teen's point of view. Perfect for the character!!
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